Friday Excerpt: Being the Best Ex

Friday Excerpt: Being the Best Ex

I’m back to doing the Romantic Friday Writers challenges! This one is themed “Being the Best Ex.” There’s so many things that could mean. I decided to do mine from my novel Breath(e), showing the great relationship that Elizabeth and Stewart maintain after they are no longer dating.

Word Count: 232

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Elizabeth sighed. “Yeah,” she said. Having a real conversation with Susan just wasn’t possible; she was too good at deflection. Why did Elizabeth even feel the need to connect with her mother? Couldn’t she just leave it be? After all, who had a mother that actually understood? It wasn’t even normal for your mother to know you fully.

In her room with the door closed she called Stewart on her cell phone. “Remind me that I’m a good person.”

“Is someone suggesting otherwise?”

“My family.”

He laughed. “Welcome to my world: where parents cause more problems than they solve. You’ve got to stop listening to them. You don’t owe them anything.”

“Yes I do! They’re my parents.”

“They’re the ones who wanted to have children. You didn’t ask to be born.”

“What if they’re right and this thing is bad?”

“I know it’s scary, it was scary for me, but I’m convinced that it isn’t bad. I have a more authentic relationship with you than I do with anyone else in my life, that wouldn’t happen if you were simply fixated on my disability.”

“Thanks,” Elizabeth said with a sigh.

“You’re okay,” Stewart said.

“Yeah, yeah, yeah.” She picked at the bedspread with her fingernails. “I tried to date an able-bodied guy, you know.”

“How did that go?”

“Terrible.”

He laughed again. “Be true to yourself, Elizabeth, you’ll make yourself miserable otherwise.”

10 Comments

  1. Anna's Adorments
    Jun 15, 2012

    Dear Ruth,
    Welcome back to RFW! This was a great excerpt for the theme. You have the ex and you have a conflict with parents. Lots of interesting stuff packed into this short text.
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Anna’s RFW #38

  2. Beverly Diehl
    Jun 15, 2012

    Love the way Stewart supports and encourages Elizabeth. Ah, if only ALL exes were like that. Great piece.

  3. Heather Murphy
    Jun 15, 2012

    This is so sweet! I think they should be together 🙂

    • RuthMadison
      Jun 15, 2012

      Awww! I think if you read the whole story it becomes clear that their better as friends, but they are wonderful and supportive friends!

  4. Andy
    Jun 16, 2012

    Dear Ruth,
    Great story and yes, if only all exes were like that. In life, what we see standing on the outside is sometimes not what is beautiful to those experiencing the pain on the inside.

  5. L'Aussie
    Jun 16, 2012

    Hi Ruth! I”m excited to see you back. Have missed your excerpts on Fridays. I’m sorry to see Elizabeth and Stewart have broken up. I think they were still together when I read you last excerpts.

    I love that crack about dating an able-bodied guy wasn’t such a great experience. Of course, able-bodied or disabled, it’s all about who you are, and your personality isn’t in your legs!

    It’s great to read about these two again and look forward to what you will do for the next challenge – Stuck in the Middle.

    Denise

    • RuthMadison
      Jun 16, 2012

      Thanks! I missed you guys too. I’ll be around to do comments on everyone else’s soon.

      You’re so right that it’s all about who you are and not physical properties. I’m discovering that for sure in my own personal life, as I fell in love with someone I didn’t expect! lol.

  6. Myrna
    Jun 17, 2012

    There are few ex’s like Stuart. Enjoyed reading this excerpt. It left me wanting more.

  7. Donna Hole
    Jun 18, 2012

    You captured the “perfect ex” part perfectly. And the romance. So much storyline revealed in these few words. I am intrigued by your story concepts Ruth.

    Thanks for participating in this weeks RFW prompt.

    ……dhole

  8. Celeste
    Jun 18, 2012

    This was a very dialogue about the enternal “Who do you love more? Your parents or me?” I think you captured the stress and the drama of that situation well.

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